Any plans to ever show the unstilted version of your script? I've always been pretty curious as to what some of "Trek's writing rules" are. Especially with how often RDM brings it up in his commentaries.
The changes to the submitted script were remarkably minor - some adjustments to the first and last scene, the substitution of Troi for Riker in a Sickbay scene, and dialogue adjustments throughout - and just about all were clear improvements. Tam's the only character who got his dialogue changed for being too colloquial; we knew the show well enough to keep the other characters in character. I'd just hoped to relax the boundaries a bit by portraying Elbrun as eccentric.